The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20
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The
given
bar graph shows the consumption of Verb problem
apply
Use synonyms
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
ownership
during 2002 to 2010 and the level of education from 2002 to 2010 the displayed Use synonyms
source
of No high Fix the agreement mistake
sources
school
diploma, High Use synonyms
school
graduate, College, Bachelor’s degree and Postgraduate qualification.
The graph Use synonyms
revels
the following Important facts. Correct your spelling
reveals
Firstly
, Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
overall
Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
computer
Use synonyms
ownership
was sharply Use synonyms
increase
from 2002 to 2010. Wrong verb form
increased
Moreover
, Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
computer
Use synonyms
ownership
by education level Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
rise
Change the verb form
rises
during
2002 to 2010. Change preposition
from
Therefore
, Linking Words
in
2002, Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
computer
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ownership
, there Use synonyms
were climb
from 55 Change the verb form
climbed
percentage
in 2002 to 75 Replace the word
per cent
percentage
in 2010. There Replace the word
per cent
were
dramatically Correct subject-verb agreement
was
increase
Change the form of the verb
increased
over
25 Change preposition
of over
percentage
.
In Replace the word
per cent
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
computer
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ownership
by education level. In 2002, there were over 15 % from No high Use synonyms
school
diploma and 35% from high Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
graduate
less than but in 2010, has Fix the agreement mistake
graduates
increase
to 35% and 60%. Wrong verb form
increased
Moreover
, the college, Bachelor’s degree and postgraduate qualification Linking Words
were grow
from 55%, 65% and 75% in 2002 to over 75% which postgraduate qualification was higher
In 90 % in 2010.Change the verb form
were grown
were growing
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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