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You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter •Explain what type of car you would like •Give details of when you would like the car •Request more information about the cost

#rent #car #holiday #agency #•explain #type #•give #•request #information #cost
Dear Mr Tommy, I am writing to rent a
car
7-seats
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7 seats
 for together my family to Nha Trang go to
a
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on a
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trip. I am going to Nha Trang City the next week and
i
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I
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 will be in Nha Trang City for six days from May 10 to May 15 for my holiday trip. I would like a
car
 black and a big
to
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one to
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 carry luggage. I like the
car
 to save gas and full equipment
such
 as seat belts and repair kits. Thanks to the
car
 rental agency. yours faithfully Chi Thien
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you use clear paragraphing, with each paragraph focusing on a separate point or request.
coherence cohesion
Employ a range of cohesive devices to better connect ideas and make your intentions clear.
coherence cohesion
Begin your letter with a proper greeting, such as 'Dear [Name]' if known, or 'Dear Sir/Madam' if not, and end with a suitable closing such as 'Yours sincerely' followed by your full name.
task achievement
Respond to all parts of the task prompt clearly, making sure not to omit any requested details.
task achievement
Maintain a formal or semi-formal tone suitable for the context throughout your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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