The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in five economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.

The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in five economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.
The given line graph provides information about labour force occupation in five distinct sectors in the USA in a given period of 80 years.
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,
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while
farming, fishing and foresting peaked at the onset.
however
, it experienced a dramatic decline
at the end
of the year.
In contrast
, the industrial recorded the least job
initially
,
however
, it surpassed all the other parts
at the end
of the period.
To begin
with, the labour force occupation in farming, fishing and foresting was about 80 in 1930.
This
figure experienced a gradual decline to about 70 in the next ten years until it witnessed a significant decrease to 0 in the
last
year. With regards to the other portions, industrial was not present in 1930, it started in 1940 with 0
while
it increased substantially soaring to its peak of about 38. Both sales and office, other service and technical stood off about 10. Their trend plateaued from 1930 to 1990 until technical reaching its peak of about 30 which was higher than its competitors.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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