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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of electricity generated in both
Germany
 and
France
 from all sources and renewables in 2009.
Overall
, the total amount of electricity
generation
 in
Germany
 was higher than in
France
.
Moreover
, the highest electricity
generation
 in
Germany
 was conventional thermal,
whereas
 in
France
, it was nuclear
power
. In the case of the production percentage of conventional thermal in
Germany
, it stood at 59.6%, yet in
France
, it was about the tenth.
In contrast
, nuclear
power
 covered about
three quarters
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three-quarters
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 in
France
,
however
, in
Germany
, it took up less than
one quarter
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. Turning to the
generation
 of renewable sources, it was around one-sixth in both of the countries. Regarding renewable sources, the rate of biomass
generation
 in
Germany
 was about 40%,
while
 in
France
 the proportion was only 8.1%. The ratio of hydroelectric
generation
 was 80.5% in
France
 which was four times higher than in
Germany
 (17.7%). In the case of wind
power
, it comprised almost 37% in
Germany
 and about tenth in
France
. Meanwhile, solar energy was less than 1% in
France
 and 6.1% in
Germany
. In terms of geothermal
power
, it was not generated in either of the given countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, france, generation, power with synonyms.
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