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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of electricity generated in both
Germany
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 and
France
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 from all sources and renewables in 2009.
Overall
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, the total amount of electricity
generation
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 in
Germany
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 was higher than in
France
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.
Moreover
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, the highest electricity
generation
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 in
Germany
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 was conventional thermal,
whereas
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 in
France
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, it was nuclear
power
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. In the case of the production percentage of conventional thermal in
Germany
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, it stood at 59.6%, yet in
France
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, it was about the tenth.
In contrast
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, nuclear
power
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 covered about
three quarters
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 in
France
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,
however
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, in
Germany
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, it took up less than
one quarter
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. Turning to the
generation
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 of renewable sources, it was around one-sixth in both of the countries. Regarding renewable sources, the rate of biomass
generation
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 in
Germany
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 was about 40%,
while
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 in
France
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 the proportion was only 8.1%. The ratio of hydroelectric
generation
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 was 80.5% in
France
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 which was four times higher than in
Germany
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 (17.7%). In the case of wind
power
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, it comprised almost 37% in
Germany
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 and about tenth in
France
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. Meanwhile, solar energy was less than 1% in
France
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 and 6.1% in
Germany
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. In terms of geothermal
power
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, it was not generated in either of the given countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, france, generation, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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