Some people sat History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that,in today's world,subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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people who live in
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modern society cannot achieve
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bright future.It is commonly thought that
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by every kid in
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,other humankind
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that studying Science and Technology can amplify children's knowledge.
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all old
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namely
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or others must be thought in schools. It is irrefutable that youngsters always make an effort to be genius all of the subjects but they sometimes face
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some issues with
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related to the past.
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,a number of children who study at schools have different views which means some of them prefer to learn Technology which is chained with digital technologies and they get bored
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if they seat in
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classes because of that,ancestors,World Wars or soldiers do not much interesting.
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they expand their other subjects.
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the majority of people do love
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and they consider that every child,not only
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each man and woman have to know about
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because if people learn about their ancestors or World Wars they started to be environmental-friendly which means they do not do any detrimental things to the nature
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their cities anymore
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they begun to understand that they are living in paradise life.As opposed
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,
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can open all gates which
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lead to
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future.
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,individuals who argue with each other
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two
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of the same coin
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,their souls and minds are contrary
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why,I can safely say my opinion and I guess children who study
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in their educational centre can learn how to shield their place and they can feel that their countries should be near and dear to every person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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