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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following table demonstrates the dissimilarities in the levels of poverty of different family types in Australia in 1999.
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, young families with
children
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 were more likely to be poor than households with elderly members, except for the single without
children
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 type. Regarding the three major categories,
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 the poverty rate was the highest among homes with only one primary carer, at 21%, followed by a 2% lower group of single individuals without sons or daughters, at 19%.
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, 12% of couples with
children
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 were classed as poor, ranking third in the table. In terms of the remaining categories,
single aged
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 persons and elderly couples made up 6% and 4%, respectively of the Australian total rates of poor households, considered as the least likely to live below the poverty line, as opposed to pairs with
children
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, at 7%.
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, all households which live in impoverishment in Australia accounted for 11%.

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