The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.
The bar chart illustrates the fast
food
items expenditure in Million
pounds
by income
groups in the UK in 1990 (including humburger
, pizza, fish and chips).
Correct your spelling
hamburger
hamburgers
Overall
, humburger
was the most bought item by Correct your spelling
hamburger
people
with high income
and average income
. Whereas
, fish and chips was
bought mostly by Change the verb form
were
people
with low income
.
With the most popular food
- humburger
, Correct your spelling
hamburger
hamburgers
people
with high income
spent most on this
food
with more than 45 million
pounds
, followed by people
with average income
( they spent 35 million
pounds
on this
food
)
In
contrast
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,contrast
people
with low income
spent only 15 millions
Change to singular
million
pounds
on humburger
.
Regarding the Correct your spelling
hamburger
hamburgers
the
fish and chips, Remove the redundancy
apply
people
with average
Correct article usage
an average
income
spent most
on it (they spent 25 Correct article usage
the most
million
pounds
for
Change preposition
on
this
food
). Whereas
, people
with high income
and low income
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spent
spen
around 15 Correct your spelling
spend
million
pounds
for it
With pizza, people
with high income
spent nearly 20 Fix the agreement mistake
incomes
millions
Change to singular
million
pounds
. People
with average income
spent a
half of 20 Remove the article
apply
millions
Change to singular
million
pounds
and people
with low income
spent more Change preposition
than one
one third
of 20 Add a hyphen
one-third
million
pounds
for
pizza.Change preposition
on
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