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the grapgh shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an Engligh town in 2012.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of children,
boys
, and
girls
, playing six sports ( tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming,
football
, and hockey) in a given town in England in 2012.
Overall
, the number of
boys
 playing sports exceeded that of
girls
 in that period. There is the most significant difference between the genders in
football
.
While
football
 is the most popular
sport
 for
boys
 in the given period, swimming is the highest score got
girls
. Looking at precisely, four sports are more popular for
boys
 than
girls
: tennis,
football
, cycling, and hockey.
While
 60
boys
 played
football
, the number of
girls
 playing that
sport
 was considerably lower (around 20). Regarding tennis, the figure for
boys
 who played that
sport
 was 50
instead
 of just under 40 for
girls
.
Similarly
, more
boys
 cycled than
girls
 (approximately 35 and 20 respectively). The difference in hockey is minimal, with only about five more
boys
 playing that
sport
 than
girls
.
On the other hand
, badminton and swimming are vice versa, showing a difference of about ten between the genders. As many as 50
girls
 preferred swimming compared to 40
girls
 for badminton.
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