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the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting the reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant
The six pie charts illustrate the proportions of
water
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 consumed for industrial
use
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, agricultural
use
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 and domestic
use
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 in six countries of the world.
Overall
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, considering the six counties as North
America
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,
Europe
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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, there are shown considerably higher
usage
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 in the agricultural field and lower
usage
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 for domestic purposes. The
water
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usage
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 in the agriculture sector in North
America
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, South
America
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,
Europe
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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 is 39%, 71%, 32%, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively.
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, except for North
America
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 and
Europe
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, the remaining countries used
water
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 greater than 75%.
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, the opposite view could be seen for individual
usage
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 in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 as lower than 15%. The rest of the two countries are shown between 35%-40%. Both Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 revealed
which
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the lowest portion of
water
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usage
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 7%. Africans have consumed a quite low percentage (9%) of
water
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 for human needs. North
America
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 and
Europe
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use
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water
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 for their daily needs at 13% and 15%.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, america, europe, asia, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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