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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004
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These two given line graphs provide some information about the financial value of the exportation from two dissimilar countries, including Australia and Japan to New Zealand between 1994-2004.
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,
while
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 the whole amount of New Zealand importation from Australia significantly increased over
this
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 period of time, the amount of imported goods from Japan reduced.
According to
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 the first graph, the number of import figures from Australia had been about 4000
million
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dollars
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 at the beginning and it experienced a growing
trend
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 over the following two years
then
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this
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trend
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 was reversed and
this
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 amount decreased until 1999 by 3000
million
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dollars
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. From 1999 to 2001, the figure rocketed up significantly to more than 7000
million
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dollars
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.
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, with the exception of a downward
trend
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 that can be observed from 2001 to 2004,
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finally
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this
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trend
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 reached a peak of 8000
million
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dollars
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 in the
last
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 year of
this
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 period of time. Moving into the second graph, the entire value of importation from Japan was 3000
million
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. Over the next 3 years, it reached a peak of just over 6000
million
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 and during the following seven years, except
some
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 fluctuations that it experienced the whole number of import figures fell considerably to 2000
million
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dollars
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, dollars, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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