You nearly complete your trial work period of two months and desire to become an official employee in the company. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you deserve to pass the trial work period Explaining what benefits you are able to bring for the company if passed Explaining what skills you should improve Stating your long-term career goals if your have an opportunity to work in the company Try to write a minimum of 50 words.

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realized that
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am very suitable for
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really want to have a long relationship with
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so
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can contribute to
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and improve my hard and soft skills. I will work hard and
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do my best to contribute to the
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get the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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