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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because universities are in different places. What are the merits and demerits of both situations?

#university #students #families #home #universities #places #merits #demerits #situations
University
education
 varies
on
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 different locations based on
numours
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numerous
type
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types
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 of courses, quality of
education
 and its pattern. It is
the
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 fact that many
of
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the
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people have to leave their
hometown
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hometowns
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 for better
education
. Though some of them
fortunate
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 enough to get
the
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an
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education
to
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in
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 their hometown or
due to
 some circumstances they take their
education
while
 living with their
parents
.
Firstly
, I believe living with
parents
 is always better
in
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 any stage.
Parents
provides
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 you the additional support and protect you from any kind of harsh situation.
Parents
keeps
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 track
on
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 your progress in your life and help you to become a good person.
Students
 staying home with their family don't need to look after
for
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their household duties. Their lifestyle remains intact and no major change to daily life which makes it easier for them to focus more on their studies and to achieve their future goals.
On the other hand
,
Students
 living
on
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in
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 different location without their family or
parents
 finds huge
chnage
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changes
 in their lifestyle and daily routine. There are many positives and negatives
while
 living alone for your studies.
Students
 have to manage everything
by
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 their own. Either they have to look for their
accomodation
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accommodation
, their groceries or
othere
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other
 daily requirements. They become more responsible as they need to take care of everything
by
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on
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 their own. Some
students
also
 work
while
 their
studies
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 to pay their fees which make them
even
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an even
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 better person.
Whereas
,
Students
also
 have to stay alone which makes them sad or homesick. Sometimes it has been seen that
students
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arestudents
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 unable to handle pressure and they become addicted to bad
habbits
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habits
 like drugs etc. Living without
parents
 makes you independent but some of them get trapped in
illigle
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illegal
 activities. conclusion, Living with or without
parents
 for higher
education
 has advantages and disadvantages,
Its
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it is
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 upon the student
also
 if he/she can handle the pressure and
strong
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is strong
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 enough to live independently and can make their own decision for
good
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a good
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 future he/she can study well
while
 living without
parents
otherwise
 he/she can find out good
opertunity
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opportunity
 near to their hometown and make their
carrer
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career
 a good start.
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