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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that video games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?​

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Although
 some people believe that
games
 are beneficial for an individual and consider
it
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 a learning tool, other thought that it is detrimental to the user. In my opinion, video
games
 do have more disadvantages compared to advantages. Starting with the benefits it helps to develop soft
skills
such
 as critical thinking and problem-solving
skills
.
While
 playing these
games
 individual tries to solve the mystery, results will think out of the box and eventually will solve the obstacle which was coming his or her way.
For example
,
study
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of
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New
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the New
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 York
times
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 proved that children who indulge in
the
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video
games
 are more likely to solve
problem
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problems
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 compared to
non gamers
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. Even though it helps to polish the soft
skills
,
but
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the physical health of gamers is totally opposite of that. As videos
games
does
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 require long sitting hours and only hand movements, which adversely
effect
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affect
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 the spinal cord and other joints causing various health issues like back pain,
joints
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 pain and many more.
According to
 the report by World Health Organization physical pain among new generations has
been
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increased because of less physical
activities
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. Adding more, the interest of people
into
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 computer
games
affect
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affects
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 their social
skills
. Because these computer
games
 are so
addicted
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 that
the
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gamers would tend to enjoy their own company rather than
indulging
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into
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 social activities. To
illustrates
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this
 the survey by
the
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Harvard University claimed that the number of divorces has
been
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increased
from
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past
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 two decades because of the e-
games
. In conclusion,
the
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society would be benefitted
by
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the
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electronic
games
 only if it would be handled carefully,
however
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 most of the time
it
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they
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 will arise
the
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physical and social problems which cause destruction and disturbance in human life.
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