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you recently organize an all day meeting for your company which took place in our local hotel in their feedback participants at the meeting said that they like the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was sad for lunch. write a letter to the manager of the hotel in your latter.

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Dear Sir I am writing
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 letter to the manager of the
hotel
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, I am very happy that my people do you like your
hotel
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 and they
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 like
environment
Add an article
the environment

The noun phrase environment seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 of your
hotel
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. They feel very comfortable doing all day
meeting
Fix the agreement mistake
meetings

It seems that meeting may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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 in our
hotel
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, but they are very unhappy
about
Change preposition
with

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 your food service. They are all healthy and
on
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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hygiene
Replace the word
hygienic

The word hygiene doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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. The foods are very only and most of them are burned. You should say them that the food should be very clean and not over good as well and hygiene is the most important. kind regards

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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