The bar chart data illustrates the proportion change in the global students among university graduates in different Canadian regions between 2001 and 2006.

The bar chart data illustrates the proportion change in the global students among university graduates in different Canadian regions between 2001 and 2006.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart data illustrates the proportion change in the global students among university graduates in different Canadian regions between 2001 and 2006.
The data illustrates the proportion change in the global
students
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among university graduates in different Canadian regions between 2001 and 2006. By approximately doubling, there were considerable changes in the five years. In the five years, the per
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of
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who came from other countries in New Brunswick was most popular
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showing 7 and 12 per
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in comparison to Ontario which indicated 3 and 7 per
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. In 2001,
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the provinces, the
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of international
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gradually decreased. More oversea
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in 2006 than in 2001.
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, in 2006, in Nova Scotia and in British Columbia the number of abroad
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consisted about 11 per
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although
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there were fewer than New Brunswick in the same year. Manitoba and Newfoundland and Labrador demonstrated an identical trend by reaching seven per
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in 2006
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when five years ago it was just 3 per
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. In 2001, more international graduates in Quebec than in Alberta
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cent
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