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The picture represents the various stages in the production of bricks.

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The picture represents the various stages in the production of
bricks
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.  First of all the clay is
diggered
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triggered
 and carried to the metal grid. After that, it is carried along a roller machine.
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 it is mixed with sand and water for making
bricks
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. As shown in the illustration, there are two types of brick
formation
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formations
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. In one case, the
bricks
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 are formed using
wire
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a wire
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 cutter, and in the other case, they are formed using
special
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 mould. At the next stages of the process, the formed
bricks
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 are
plased
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placed
pleased
 in the drying oven for 24-28 hours. Following that, the dried
bricks
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 are kilned
on
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at
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 moderate 200 C-980 C, and
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 high
on
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temprature
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temperatures
 870C - 1300C. After that, the
bricks
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are
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apply
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stayed in the cooling chamber
about
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for about
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 48-72 hours.
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 the cool
bricks
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 are
packaging
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packaged
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 and
delivery
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delivered
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 by truck to
building
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the building
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 industry.
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