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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart indicates which part of
Australia
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 where
people
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 come into the life and
percentage
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 of
people
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 who were born in or outside of
Australia
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 between the years 1995 and 2010.
Firstly
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, in 1995, the most proportion is
people
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 who open one’s eyes to the world outside of
Australia
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 with 60 %
However
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, provinces are the final choice for parents to give birth in 1995 with approximately 15 per cent.
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, in 2010, most mothers preferred cities to bring a baby into the world outside
Australia
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 with 80%.
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 the least
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 of the bar graph is rural areas outside of
Australia
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 with roughly 5%.
Secondly
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, over 40% of humans bring forth cities in
Australia
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 in 1995. Even though with 20% public’s
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 decision is towns in
Australia
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 in 1995. As an attachment, over 60% of society decided to have a baby in cities in
Australia
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 in 2010.
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, communities' ultimate decisions for giving birth in
Australia
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 are in rural areas and metropolis with the same
percentage
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 below 20% All in all, parents' determination about where to born their children, changed over the years.
Such
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 as, the
percentage
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 of rural areas and towns dropped among
people
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 who were born in or outside of
Australia
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, people, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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