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The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below illustrates weekly consumption by age group of dairy products in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates how much dairy products,
milk
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 and
butter
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, are consumed by four
age
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groups
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 in countries in Europe.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
milk
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 and
butter
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consumption
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 increases with
age
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 increment, except for
butter
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 usage for
seniors
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. It
also
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 is clear that younger
groups
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, less than 25
years
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, consume more full-fat products than other
groups
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 do. In terms of
milk
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, younger
people
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, less than 25
years
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, drink 1200 cc of
milk
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 weekly, which is the lowest among all
groups
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, and more than a
half
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 prefer full fat to low fat.
This
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 pattern is reversed for
seniors
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 who consume 700 ccs more
milk
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 than younger
people
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, and two-thirds prefer low-fat
milk
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. The
consumption
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 of
milk
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 for the other two
groups
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, 26 to 45 and 45 to 65 is almost similar 1650 and 1670 respectively.
Although
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 more than two-thirds of the 26 to 45
group
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 drink low-fat,
this
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 number is slightly more than
half
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 for the 45 to 65
group
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. Regarding
butter
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, its
consumption
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 increases with
age
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 increment, except for
seniors
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.
people
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 younger than 25
years
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 eat 12
grams
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 of
butter
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 weekly which is just seven
grams
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 less than the next
age
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group
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 26 to 45
years
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.
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, their interest patterns in fat content are reversed since 60 per cent of the young
group
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 like full fat compared to 40 per cent in the other
group
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. The middle-aged
group
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 and
seniors
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 have almost similar tastes in fat,
half
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 prefer low-fat
butter
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. The only difference is the proportion of
consumption
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 as
seniors
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 eat
butter
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half
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 of the middle
age
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people
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 do, at 30
grams
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 and 60
grams
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 respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, butter, age, groups, consumption, seniors, years, people, half, group, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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