You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employee say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear parents I have seen your advertisement in

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Australian magazine I have a Lougee

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after my parents and my son so I have experience of

this

job

, so I am interested in your

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if I get a chance for

this

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I would work very hard and parent caregiver to everyone I and parent caregiver to everyone. I like

this

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very much and I have more knowledge about

this

job

. I have already

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this

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beforeI

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this

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very much and I have more knowledge about

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. I have already

did

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this

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before so I will be very familiar to everyone I will be very happy to do

this

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. I feel very lucky. And I spend my leisure time in Australia visiting many new

visiting many new

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places and I went to visit my friends I don't have many friends. and I went to my

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interview in many places, but most of them are not suitable for me. So if I got to do

this

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, I will be very hard-working and do my

job

properly. kind regards

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

188 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Structure your letter

Now a days, many families are rarely having meals together. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development.

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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