Due to low revenue in 6 months, your company is going to change its policy, especially the deduction of lunch allowance that makes you not happy. Write an email to the Human Resources Department: saying you do not agree with this change explaining why the employees deserve to receive former policy stating your suggestions how to help your company overcome the difficulty of finance Try to write a minimum of 50 words

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Dear Human Resources Department, I hope you're doing well. I wanted to talk about the recent change in the lunch allowance. I am not really happy about it. Before, we used to get a bit extra for lunch, which

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and fair. I think keeping that old way would show that our work is appreciated and keep us motivated.

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we can think about new ways to save money, like finding simpler or smarter ways to do things or

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new investors. Sincerely, Dang Thi Quynh

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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