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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.
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The line graph illustrates information about the relationship between
age
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 and
crime
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 in numbers,
while
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 the pie chart provides data on
crime
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 in percentage, including four types in the UK earlier year.
Overall
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, teenagers were mostly active in committing crimes than children and old
age
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 people.
Similarly
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, violent
crime
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 was the highest among other types of illegal activities. With regard to the line graph, the youth group between 12 and 24 were majorly active. At the adolescent
age
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, the figure went up drastically and experienced a 70,000
crime
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 rate. The individuals who were 20 years hit a high of 80,000. It fell to 60,000 when their
age
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 was 24 and fell sharply when they turned 28. As their old
age
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 increased their number deteriorated.
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, it remained constant during the maturity of 56 to 60 and ended up being the lowest of 10 thousand. Taking a close look at the chart, violent
crime
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 accounted for 46%, being the highest among the other three types. About a quarter, 23% and 22% were reported as property and drug misdeeds, respectively. Public order comprised only 9% of the whole chart
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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