The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph explains the proportion of overweight
between
boys and girls aged Change preposition
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from12
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from 12
to
19 in the US Change preposition
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accoring
to their background, in 2004 and 2014.
Generally speaking, what stands out from Correct your spelling
according
diagram
is that in 2014 the percentage of obesity was higher among all studied groups.
In 2004, Correct article usage
the diagram
hispanic
was the Correct your spelling
Hispanics
most fat
group with 13%, Change the adjective
fattest
while
non-
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non-Hispanic
hispanic
white placed in
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1
% Correct article usage
a 1
diffrence
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difference
Similarly
, non
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non-hispanic
hispanic
black people was
the least overweight Correct subject-verb agreement
were
catagory
with 11% and 1% difference with Correct your spelling
category
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a non-hispanic
non-
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non-Hispanic
hispanic
white.
In 2014, same as 2004, hispanic
had the highest percentage of fat people with 27%. Correct your spelling
Hispanics
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, the cahnge
between each bracket was much greater Correct your spelling
change
compare
to ten years ago, and the figure for non-Change the form of the verb
compared
hispanic
white and non
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non-hispanic
hispanic
black was 17% and 20% respectivaly
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respectively
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