The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar charts below show the prevalence of obesity among boys and girls aged 12 to 19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph explains the proportion of overweight
between
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boys and girls aged
from12
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from 12
to
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19 in the US
accoring
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according
to their background, in 2004 and 2014. Generally speaking, what stands out from
diagram
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the diagram
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is that in 2014 the percentage of obesity was higher among all studied groups. In 2004,
hispanic
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Hispanics
was the
most fat
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group with 13%,
while
non-
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non-Hispanic
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hispanic
white placed
in
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second with only
1
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%
diffrence
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difference
.
Similarly
,
non
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hispanic
black people
was
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the least overweight
catagory
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category
with 11% and 1% difference with
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a non-hispanic
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non-
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non-Hispanic
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hispanic
white. In 2014, same as 2004,
hispanic
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Hispanics
had the highest percentage of fat people with 27%.
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, the
cahnge
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change
between each bracket was much greater
compare
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to ten years ago, and the figure for non-
hispanic
white and
non
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non-hispanic
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hispanic
black was 17% and 20%
respectivaly
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respectively
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hispanic with synonyms.
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