1.) Some people think that having a set retirement age (eg. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that a certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement

It was taught by certain people that the

retirement

age

should be equal for everyone without considering the different types of occupations and pensions

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for some workers at an earlier

age

. In my opinion. I disagree with

this

statement.

In addition

, I opine that high-risk jobs and volunteers are supposed to get benefits from early

retirement

. First of all, despite its

benefit

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and importance, each job’s

retirement

age

should be decided depending on different kinds of risks and how much effort it takes to

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these careers.

Otherwise

, risky and hard jobs will not be given justice in their working life.

For example

, a petrochemical worker who works with dangerous gases should get an earlier

retirement

, compared to a teacher whose job

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to take a lower risk and easier to be. The elders who have more experience than the rookies are still necessary in every industry.

Nevertheless

, the more

age

affects their working abilities. Should some careers become older, these workers will lead to several problems in their working process

as well as

the company itself, including society.

For instance

, An ageing bus driver whose awareness of safety on the road is a must during his working hours may suffer an accident, which brings about not only a mistake but a possible death

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also

.

However

, even though every job should get welfare from early

retirement

, a higher-risk career who has been working in danger should benefit from the organization significantly. Or else, no one wants to be a high-risk worker because the reward

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not worth the danger. For another instance.

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and police have been taking a number of unpredictable situations that can steal their soul. Nowadays, most governments in the world established a provident fund for the working class,

on the other hand

, these prizes haven’t been given to a volunteer to improve our world. It isn’t fair.

Therefore

, the Senate which is the place of representative citizens is supposed to design or revise the equitable law.

To conclude

, I disagree with

this

topic, because suitable time not only depends on

age

but is supposed to rely on risk and hardness, including workability.

Furthermore

, high-risk jobs and volunteers should

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benefit from their organization outstanding.