The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the

UK in 1998.
The given table chart represents information on
expenditures
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the expenditures
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of
children
and adults on four prevalent goods in percentages, in the UK in the year 1998.
Overall
, the adults, including men and women spent on
food
most of their income,
whereas
children
, including boys spent mostly on music.
However
, the first category contributed a mere
percent
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per cent
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of their income on
this
item.
According to
the table, the least
percent
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percentage
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,
women
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of women
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spent on videos,
which
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apply
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is equal to 0.5%. On
food
,
on the other hand
,
this
category of people contributed 39% of their revenues.
Likewise
, adults and men spent 1% and 2% on videos, and 25% and 14%, which is the highest percentages, on
the
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apply
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food
. All these people spent the same
percent
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percentage
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(5%) on music,
also
. Contrastingly,
children
, boys, and girls do not often buy
food
, and throughout the year, spent only 10%, 9%, and 11% on
this
item, respectively. But on
music
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,music
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these categories spent the most of their income (from 38% to 40%). Electronic equipment, though, is not a prevalent item, and
children
is
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are
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the only category, that spent 23%
,
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because other people spent
by
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far less than
this
number.
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