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The pie charts below show unitsof electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show unitsof electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate
units
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 of
electricity
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 by five different
fuel
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 sources in
Australia
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 and
France
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 in 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that coal was the main
fuel
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 source for
electricity
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 in
Australia
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while
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 nuclear power was the majority of
fuel
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 source in
France
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 in 2000. Looking at the information in more detail, in
Australia
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, 50
units
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 of
electricity
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 used coal,
while
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 50
units
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 of
electricity
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 used coal and natural
gas
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 in the equal number in
France
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, in 1980.
Australia
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 consumed natural
gas
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 and hydropower for
electricity
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 at 20
units
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 and 20
units
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. In
France
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, 20
units
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 and 15
units
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 of
electricity
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 used oil and nuclear power respectively. In 2000,
Australia
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 used coal as the main
fuel
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 around two third
units
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 of 180
units
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 total, and 36
units
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 and 4
units
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 came from the
fuel
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 of hydropower, natural
gas
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, and oil respectively.
However
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, the most significant
fuel
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 source in
France
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 was nuclear power at 126
units
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. 50
units
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 used coal and oil, and merely 4
units
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 used natural
gas
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 and hydropower.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, electricity, fuel, australia, france, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • electricity production
  • fuel source
  • percentage
  • units of electricity
  • coal
  • natural gas
  • nuclear power
  • hydropower
  • oil
  • renewable energy
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • remain constant
  • proportion
  • notable shift
  • comparatively
  • account for
  • dominant source
  • aggregate change
  • fluctuate
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