The bar chart shows the proportion of male and female teachers in six categories of educational setting in England in 2010.

The bar chart shows the proportion of male and female teachers in six categories of educational setting in England in 2010.
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information about the proportion of different gender in six categories of educational setting in England in 2010. In the nursery, almost all of the
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are female and the percentage of it is account for 97%. The figure
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male
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is represent only about 3%. There is
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similar data in Primary school. The proportion of men is 5% higher than that in
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. In
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secondary school, male and female
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make up 47% and 52% respectively.
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, the percentage of male and female
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is the same in college. And in private training
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men is 53% and the women is 46%. In university education settings, the proportion of male
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is more than twice that of female
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.
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in six different types is greater than that of
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as a whole. And in educational settings where students are young, female
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predominate.
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