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The natural resources, such as oil, forests, and water, are being consumed at an alarming rate, what problems does it cause? How can we solve these problems?

#resources #oil #forests #water #rate
Some
people
 argue that the natural resource spending
rate
are
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 significantly increasing.The
rate
 is dangerous for the earth. If we use natural
resources
 like now, in near the future, we would not be able to use natural
resources
. In the past, only
few
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people
 had
cars
.
However
,nowadays, a lot of
people
 have
cars
. The car has become very important in our lives .
As a result
, the oil spending
rate
 is higher than in the past.
Also
,
air
 pollution too is big increasing.
In addition
, recently, the big cities have a lot of buildings and houses. The construction
spended
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 many
trees
, Because, they were built using
trees
 .
Thus
, the number of
cuting
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cutting
trees
 has become higher than the number of
trees
. And,for the reasons mentioned above, the earth has become global warming. Among the effects are that
the
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global warming
go
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 up
air
conditioners
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using
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rate
.And, that means they will have a high electricity use
rate
.
AS
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 a result, a lot of natural
resources
 have to be made for electricity.
This
 is a bad cycle for the consumed
resources
. We can break the bad cycle. If our
cars
 change to the
electic
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electric
cars
. And, in the house, the
air
 conditioner setting
change
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 the temperature down to 1 or 2. Because
,
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 we are able to decrease Co2
air
 pollution and oil spending
rate
. And, we should plant more
trees
 than the number of
trees
 cut. Because
,
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 that action will have a good effect on the future. In conclusion,
this
 way of solving the issues has many different ways. Among them
,
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way
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of
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individual
people
 being able to
simple
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 do it.
Such
like
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as
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air
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the air
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 conditioner setting change, taking public transportation , etc. That action is very simple, but that effect will be very big.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-renewable resources
  • economic instability
  • water shortages
  • agricultural production
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable management
  • conservation
  • alternative energy
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • water conservation
  • responsible consumption
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