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The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how many
students
 from five foreign
countries
 enrolled in a
third year
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third-year
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 computer science course at a Canadian college.
Overall
, the
number
 of female
students
 is larger than that of male ones, and women tend to choose
net working
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net-working
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 core
course
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courses
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 compared to men. The
number
 of
students
 from China, including 8 men and 9 women, is the largest in the graph. And more than
three fourths
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three-fourths
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 of female
students
 enrolled in
network
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the network
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 core option,
although
 only
a
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an
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 eighth of male
students
 chose that option.
This
 tendency is
same
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the same
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 as in
students
 from Singapore and Malaysia
while
 the student’s
number
 from both
this
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these
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countries
 is smaller than that of China.
On the other hand
, only
on
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in
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 Sri
lanka
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Lanka
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, the
number
 of women is smaller than that of men. Focusing on France female
students
 who entered in
net working
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networking
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 option do not exist
contrast
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in contrast
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 to other
countries
’
trend
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trends
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. The table provides
the
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apply
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data about journeys made by different forms of
transport
such
 as;
car
, bicycle, public
transport
 and on foot in four
countries
 including
Canada
, Belgium, Germany and
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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. And the bar chart illustrates the result of a survey about
car
use
 in
Canada
.
Overall
, the
use
 of
car
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cars
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 is much more popular than other transportation in all
countries
, and in
Canada
, the main reasons that people
use
 cars are
need
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the need
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 for work and
lack
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the lack
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 of other methods. Focusing on
car
use
, it is the most popular mode of
transport
 in each country, especially in
Canada
, 90%
journeys
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of journeys
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 are made by
car
.
Although
bike
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the bike
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 is the least popular means in almost all
countries
, it has great popularity following the
car
 in
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 and 26% of journeys are made by
bicycles
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bicycle
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 in the nation. Examining public
transport
 and on foot, they are used as modes for travel at about 10% on average. Considering
the
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apply
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car
use
 in
Canada
, Canadians
use
 cars mainly because of
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their needs
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needs
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need
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 for work or no alternatives.
Also
, there are some other reasons,
for example
, cars are convenient,
car
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the car
a car
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 is quicker than other
transport
 and they have to work nightshift.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, overall".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, countries, number, transport, car, canada, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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