IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK be-tween 1972 and 2000 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK be-tween 1972 and 2000 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates how many
tonnes
Use synonyms
 of goods were transported in the UK by four separate forms of transport from 1972 to 2000.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 the highest tonnage of goods was distributed by road during the period.
Conversely
Linking Words
,
pipeline
Add an article
the pipeline
a pipeline
show examples
 was the conveyance method which carried the lowest weight throughout. Focusing on water and rail as means of transport, these distributed 39
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 and 40
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 of goods respectively in 1972. By 1976, their figures were identical at 40
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
, after which water conveyance increased considerably as rail transportation fell. Rail distribution eventually recovered following some fluctuation to 41
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 transported in 2000. Meanwhile, transport via water levelled out around 59
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 before dipping in 1996 and
then
Linking Words
 rising to 62
million
Use synonyms
 in 2000. As for haulage via road and pipeline, the former rose from 72
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 1972 to about 98
million
Use synonyms
 in 2000,
while
Linking Words
 the latter began at 2
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 before growing by 20
million
Use synonyms
 over the next twenty years, remaining at approximately 22
million
Use synonyms
 until the century’s end.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: