The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The provided chart and table illustrate the
export
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earnings
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of a country and changes in each product between 2015 and 2016. It is clearly observed from the chart that over the period, the highest earning in both years was for petroleum
products
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,
whereas
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the lowest amount of
export
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accounted for textiles.
Moreover
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, the significant change in
value
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was for textiles ,
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however
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gems and jewellery underwent a decrease in
value
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.
To begin
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with, the highest amount of
export
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earnings
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was for petroleum
products
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in 2015 about 61
billion
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and in 2016 approximately 63
billion
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, whilst there was a 3% growth in petroleum
products
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’ values.
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, the figure for engineered goods in 2015 was 58
billion
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which fell below that of in 2016 about 62
billion
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.
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, engineered goods values saw an increase of 8.5 %. Gems and jewellery
export
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earnings
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in both years fluctuated around 42
billion
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and these
products
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had a drop in their values by about 5.18 %.
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, the
earnings
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of agricultural
products
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were approximately equal to each other in both years and their
value
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went up about 0.81%.
Finally
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, the proportion of textiles in 2015 was about 26
billion
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,
while
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that was 31
billion
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in 2016.
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, its
value
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increased dramatically by about 15.24%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, products, value, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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