Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 254 words.

Students in some country recently
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less interest
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in university. The main reason
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the student themselves and
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the given paragraph. On the one hand, since is a
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of concentration and more effort. For some juvenile who does not want to get
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in some strict learning
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atmosphere
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they give up on
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subject
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even though
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brighter future. They tend to choose
others major
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other majors
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even randomly just to achieve their
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or
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degree without
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attention
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the result and the benefits.
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period
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people
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as
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a scientist.
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important for
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themselves
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for
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society
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to support the
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existence
of our community in the recent day
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for the future of the country
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globally
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; we need
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a chemist
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to
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analyze
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pollution
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however
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student
choose
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the
subject
are limited
then
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we hired
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from abroad.
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when we did not have enough
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young people
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that
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our community.
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the lower number of
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choose
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science in some
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mainly comes
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their own
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choices
which is they find it hard to
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for the simple one.
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,
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drawbacks
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society which is hard to find their own
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related
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the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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