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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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These two plans show the map of the university
sports
center
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 in present and how it will be in the future.
It is clear that
,
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 many new features are going to be added in the upcoming plan.
However
, the entrance, pool, changing
room
, seating, and reception will be
same
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the same
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 as now
while
 the area of the gym predicted to increase. Outdoor courts have disappeared in future
map
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maps
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whereas
, leisure
pool
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pools
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 and
sports
room
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rooms
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 are there.
Although
 there will be two dancing studios
at
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 the east side. At
right
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the right
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 of the
reception
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 there is set to be
cafe
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a cafe
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 and changing
room
, at the same time there is destinated to be
sports
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a sports
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 shop and changing
room
 at the left of the reception.
Moreover
, there will be an entrance to the leisure pool from the changing
room
 which will be located next to the
sports
 shop.
Overall
, the
sports
 area in
university
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the university
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 is about to be larger in future.
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