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In modern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

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It is true that nowadays
children
 prefer to spend
time
 with their friend
instead
 of their family. In
this
 ,essay I will outline the reasons why I
don’t
 agree that
parents
 should compel their
children
 to devote their
time
 to family. There are, I feel, two main reasons.
Firstly
,
children
 share the same interests with their peers. When
children
 of similar ages, tend to have similar hobbies
such
 as video games, sports, and music, in turning invariably leads to them having more fun playing with each other and sharing the same values. What
this
 does is make it absolutely essential.
Secondly
, young people are passionate about social media and other cutting-edge technology.
For example
, Facebook, which is a highly popular social networking website, is attracted many young people to share news on it, arguably resulting in them spending most of their
time
 keeping in contact with each other, and
this
 often leads to isolation from their family.
However
, I
don’t
 agree that
parents
 should force their
children
 to stay with them. One reason is it will bring resentment in
children
’s minds. If
parents
 make their
children
 do so but not follow their own wills, they cannot understand the reason behind
this
 behaviour, and
this
 may well make them feel angry and disappointed and is extremely detrimental. Another compelling reason is compulsory cannot bring happiness. My cousin Mike,
for instance
, who is 15 years old, is asked to spend most of his
time
 with family. As
such
 he felt frustrated and become depressed
last
 year, which is ultimately why
children
 will not be happy if you force them to do things they
don’t
 like.
Overall
, there are obvious reasons why
children
 like to spend their
time
 with other
children
 more than their
parents
 and I believe that
parents
 should not force them to do things they
don’t
 want to.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic commitments
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Technology and social media
  • Peer acceptance
  • Independence
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural norms
  • Individualism
  • Parental enforcement
  • Family bonds
  • Social development
  • Autonomy versus guidance
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