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The three pie charts illustrate the proportion of undergraduates, postgraduates and all total student population in a British university library, while the table below shows the number of hours spent by students.

The three pie charts illustrate the proportion of undergraduates, postgraduates and all total student population in a British university library, while the table below shows the number of hours spent by students.
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The three pie charts illustrate the proportion of undergraduates, postgraduates and
all
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 total student population in a British university
library
,
while
 the table below shows the number of
hours
 spent by
students
.
Overall
, the proportion of postgraduates who spent fifteen
hours
 or more in the
library
 was very close to the whole
students
 who spent 1 to 7
hours
 in the
library
.
It is clear that
 in
pie
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the pie
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 charts most
students
 spent 1-7
hours
 in
library
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the library
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(in
total
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a total
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 of 130 per
cent
students
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of students
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),
on the other hand
, a modest one is 15 or more
hours
 spent in
library
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the library
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 (in
total
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a total
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 of 75 per
cent
students
). Meanwhile, it is
noticeably
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 that the average number of all three pie charts are take 8 to 14
hours
 spent in
library
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the library
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. There
are
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tiny
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a tiny
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 minority of undergraduates and all
students
(15 and 9 per
cent
) who spent 15+
hours
,
whereas
 postgraduates
in
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same
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a same
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 number of
hours
 have a massive 51 per
cent
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, hours, students, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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