The two pie charts illustrate some employment patterns by sex in Great Britain in 1992, while the table below shows the occupations of each manual and non-manual.

The two pie charts illustrate some employment patterns by sex in Great Britain in 1992, while the table below shows the occupations of each manual and non-manual.
The two pie charts illustrate some employment patterns by sex in Great Britain in 1992,
while
the table below shows the occupations of each manual and non-manual.
Overall
, the female group has a lot of non-manual
criteries
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criteria
criterion
,
whereas
male
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occupation has almost both manual and non-manual
employments
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. As we can see there is noticeably 31 per cent of clerical or related
works
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work
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prevailing to
female
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females
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, but
group
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a group
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of
male
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in
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job has only a tiny minority (6 per cent).
However
, there are 24 per cent of
craft
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of similar class in
male
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the male
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faction,
when
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female
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a female
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has only
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of
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3% in
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occupation. There are,
also
fewer interested
works
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among them
such
as general labourers
moreover
other non-manual classes.
To sum up
, there was managerial and professional
as well as
other manual occupations that male and female both engaged in.
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