The two pie charts illustrate some employment patterns by sex in Great Britain in 1992, while the table below shows the occupations of each manual and non-manual.
The two pie charts illustrate some employment patterns by sex in Great Britain in 1992,
while
the table below shows the occupations of each manual and non-manual.
Overall
, the female group has a lot of non-manual criteries
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criteria
criterion
whereas
male
occupation has almost both manual and non-manual Correct article usage
the male
employments
.
As we can see there is noticeably 31 per cent of clerical or related Fix the agreement mistake
employment
works
prevailing to Fix the agreement mistake
work
female
, but Fix the agreement mistake
females
group
of Add an article
a group
male
in Fix the agreement mistake
males
same
job has only a tiny minority (6 per cent). Change the article
the same
However
, there are 24 per cent of craft
of similar class in Add an article
the craft
male
faction, Correct article usage
the male
when
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while
female
has only Add an article
a female
the female
few
Change the article
a few
of
3% in Change preposition
apply
same
occupation. There are, Change the article
the same
also
fewer interested works
among them Replace the word
workers
such
as general labourers moreover
other non-manual classes.
To sum up
, there was managerial and professional as well as
other manual occupations that male and female both engaged in.Submitted by dnm.best on
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