The table below shows the percentage of employers in various sectors having difficulty in finding staff in 2003 and 2004.

The table below shows the percentage of employers in various sectors having difficulty in finding staff in 2003 and 2004.
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The given table depicts the difficulty employers faced in finding
workers
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for jobs in four different fields between 2003 and 2004.
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, it is readily clear that it is easier to find technical and managerial staff for the job than it is to find skilled and unskilled
staffs
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staff
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in both years. Recording to 2003, the proportion of hired individuals who faced problems in employing skilled
workers
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was slightly less than the number of people having the same issue in 2004.
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trend was similar for unskilled employees, between 41 and 47%
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of job seekers have difficulty recruiting skilled
workers
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in 2003, with the people who do not have skills in that field, about 20 to 26%. In 2004,
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figure grew to 41 to 51% and 19 to 21%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, with the technical and managerial staff, the proportion of
workers
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who found the difficulty was relatively little. In 2003, it ranged from 2 to 14 and was about 2 to 10 in 2004.
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