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The pie charts demonstrate the proportion of visitors to use librabries that cater to the masses in Britain between 1991 and 2000.

From an observation perspective, it can be seen that borrowing or returning books is the most of reason that many people visit public libraries. At the same time, few people used for study in Britain from 1991 to 2000. Looking at the figures in
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 detail, it is evident that the number of visitors borrowing or returning books at 65% in 1991, but it later 55% of tourists leased and give back books in 2000.
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, borrowing or returning videos that have not appeared in 1991.
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, visitors use public libraries to borrow or return videos just under 20% in 2000 Turning to the remaining statistics data, the figure for people visiting to read newspapers or magazines second high at around 15% in 1991,
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 the percentage of visiting the public library decreased to 5% in 2000. Similar changes can be seen in the figure for public library visitors obtain information and study of 10% in 1991.
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, obtain information almost a second that tourists use the library and just 2% in 2000.

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