The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
In the line
graph
we can see the Add a comma
graph,
persentage
of tourists to England who visited Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010. It shows that in 1980 and 2010 the most favorite attractions were the Pavilion and the Festival .Correct your spelling
percentage
And between
Correct word choice
Between
this
period the least popular attraction was the Pier but in 2010 it became the least popular than the Art Gallery.
The line graph shows that the Festivals percentage of tourists in 2010 was almost the same as in 1980 when rest
attractions in one moment were Correct article usage
the rest
favorite
and after many years became the least popular.
During the 1980s and Fix the agreement mistake
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1995s
there was Add a comma
1995s,
a
Change the article
an
increace
in visitors to the Art Gallery but Correct your spelling
increase
after
this
the percentageAdd a comma
this,
dicreased
to 20% in 1990 . Correct your spelling
decreased
However
, in
Change the preposition
at
this
moment the Pavilion climbed sharply from 28% to 48% and then
the persentage
gradually went down to 33%.
The Festival between 1980 and 2010 almost stayed in one position. Correct your spelling
percentage
Although
the Pier was upward from 10% to 22%Submitted by dnm.best on
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