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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
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The line graph demonstrates the fraction of books that were borrowed in several months in 2014 from four village libraries. The pie chart provides information about types of borrowed books: self-help, fiction, history, science,
biography
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and biography
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 that were borrowed over
this
 time.
Overall
, in
line
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the line
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 graph
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apply
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Sutton Wood shows
the
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an
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 increasing trend,
whereas
the
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Rуeslip
experience
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decline
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a decline
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 in the number of
borrowing
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books from
book
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the
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 shop. In June Ryeslip
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had
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 300, and the fraction decreased
for
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to
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 170 approximately by September. The Sutton Wood has
sharply
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 fluctuations, from 250 it went to one hundred in August and has dramatically
increase
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to 300 by September.
By contrast
 the West Eaton and Church Mount moved slightly from 50 to one hundred fifty. It is clear from
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the pie
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 chart that
Fiction
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the Fiction
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 trend is rated as a popular type of book borrowed, with a massive 43% from other groups, which consist 57% The Science and History trend include roughly equal proportions: 14
percent
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 respectively.
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