The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

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The line graph demonstrates the fraction of books that were borrowed in several months in 2014 from four village libraries. The pie chart provides information about types of borrowed books: self-help, fiction, history, science,

biography

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and biography

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that were borrowed over

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time.

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, in

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the line

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graph

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Sutton Wood shows

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increasing trend,

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decline

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a decline

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in the number of

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books from

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shop. In June Ryeslip

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300, and the fraction decreased

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170 approximately by September. The Sutton Wood has

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fluctuations, from 250 it went to one hundred in August and has dramatically

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to 300 by September.

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the West Eaton and Church Mount moved slightly from 50 to one hundred fifty. It is clear from

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chart that

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the Fiction

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trend is rated as a popular type of book borrowed, with a massive 43% from other groups, which consist 57% The Science and History trend include roughly equal proportions: 14

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respectively.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

159 words

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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