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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
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The line graph reveals the rate of tourists to England who explored
for
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different attractions in Brighton. It is evident that
share
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the share
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 of
Pavilion
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the Pavilion
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 and The Festival were significantly rise over the 1980 and 2010
years
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, in recent
years
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, the number of tourists visiting the pavilion and festival has gradually increased from 20% to 50 % and has a steady growth.
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, the percentage for the two attractions went down by varying degrees. There was a rise in Art
gallery
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 to 35% over the 1980-1985
years
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,
however
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 after that declined dramatically to 10%.
Furthermore
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, the percentage for Pier fluctuated wildly.
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, the Pier began as the least visited attraction but steadily gained popularity, surpassing the Art Gallery by 2000 and ending at around 20% in 2010. It is obvious that the percentage for Pavilion and Festival
are
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 higher in
the
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recent
years
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 than the other two attractions

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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