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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
The illustrations show how wave power is used to generate electricity in specific
structure
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structures
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. Given processes
is
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 natural, which include several steps,
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beginning
beggining
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beginning
 with
wave
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a wave
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 filling the chamber
end
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and
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 ending with
emptied
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an emptied
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 chamber. The structure itself takes place on a cliff or sea wall. First of all, the wave carries itself into
certain
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a certain
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 part of
structure
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the structure
a structure
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, filling it with water and
therefore
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 pushing
air
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 inside out. The
air
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 goes up through a column, where
turbine
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the turbine
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 is placed. The turbine is
drove
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driven
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, rotating clockwise, and it in turn generates electricity. After that, water leaves the chamber, forced by gravity, and makes space for the
air
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 to flood into. Once
air
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 goes down through
pipe
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the pipe
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 to refill the space,
turbine
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the turbine
a turbine
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is ran
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is run
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 by the gas again,
subsequently
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 generating electricity

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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