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In most successful organizations, some people believe that communication between managers and workers are the most important factor, other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is hard to say wich factors are more importat for the success of an organization. For sure comunication between managers and workers is a relevant factor, but the question is: it is really crucial? In my opion it depends on the business. In fact in some fields cooperation between people, sharing ideas and suggesting improvents, are the secrets for a good result: managers and workers understand each other better and both of them are able to espress their feelings and their needs at
work
. In
such
work
 place people involved are more relaxed: they know that,
although
 it could be some problems, it is always possible to discuss about them in name of the common purpose to
work
 better with the best results.
On the other hand
 in other kind of business other factors can be more more importat than the latter. In some fields, especially where the tecnology plays a essential rule, the personal skills of managers and workers are more importat. Indeed they have to be good at using the different machinaries, tools and instrument, more than comunicate with their collegues.
Furthermore
 sometimes, i.e. when some secret procedures are involved, the most important factor is confidentiality and an accurate organization of the
work
 all people involved.
Finally
 it is hard to choose only one of the two prospected views: there isn't only a recipe for success, but different solutions in correlation with different situations.
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