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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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the category of poor Australian families living in 1999. Overview The reason for the poverty of various poor families living in Australia is that there are old people and young
children
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. In 1999, the highest level of poverty in Australia was for elderly couples (48,000) at four
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. In the next place, there
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 six
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 of single people (54,000). The third place is occupied by
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 single parents ( 232,000). Nineteen
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 have no single
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 (359,000). Slightly below it, the number of
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 of married couples is
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 (211,000). A lower rate is twelve
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 of couples with
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 (933,000). The lowest indicator is observed in other households (1,837,000) and is eleven
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