The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The bar graph explains the number of women and
men
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in one Asian country who succeed in taking the driving exam from 1980 to 2010 In general, there is a clearly different percentage of both genders where
the
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women are in a higher position than
men
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to pass the test in the
last
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thirty years.
However
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, It shows a little inconsistent improvement for the girls in the
last
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ten years,
in contrast
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to the
men
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who show a stable change from the first year until 2000 but
then
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finally
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experienced the same position till the
last
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period. In 1980, around 49% of women proceeded the driving,
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slightly rose up to 53% for the next ten-year until it hit the peak of almost 69% in 2000 and slowly decreased to 65% in 2010.
On the other hand
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, the number of
men
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gradually increased from the first year at about 29% to around 38% in 1990 and from 2000 to 2010 it sat at the same position at just around 49%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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