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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one untiversity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one untiversity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The given bar charts demonstrate the comparison of British
students
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 who were able to converse in various
languages
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in addition
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 to English at one university in England in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most significant language was Spanish and another one,which together accounted for over half the proportion of different
languages
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.In all types of
languages
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 that were learnt by
students
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 ,there was minimal change over the 10 periods. The number of
students
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 who can speak Spanish rose marginally to 35 % in 2010.
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,another language comprised 15% in the first year and
this
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 showed a slight increase of about a mere 5% to 20% in 2010.
Furthermore
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, the proportion of
students
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 who were able to converse in two other
languages
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 and German remained stable in both years,representing only 10%.
Additionally
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, the ratio of
students
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 who didn’t know any other language except English and those who knew French was 20% and 15% in 2000. But, after 10 years it was observed to plummet to reach just 10% for both categories in 2010.
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, German speakers were the most consistent whose percentage remained unchanged.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • globalisation
  • educational reforms
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • predominant
  • future career opportunities
  • employability
  • cultural reasons
  • economic reasons
  • political reasons
  • sustained popularity
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