The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.
The chart illustrates the
bought
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buying
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and drinking
coffee
and tea in
big
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the big
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city
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cities
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of Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban,
Adelaide
and Hobart.
It is clear that
the proportion of people
went
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who went
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to
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a cafe
the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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for
coffee
or tea rose in all cities, except
Adelaide
,
while
bought
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buying
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of fresh
coffee
was
lowest
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the lowest
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proprotion
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proportion
at
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in
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all cities. The percentage of people
went
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who went
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to
cafe
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cafes
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for
coffee
or tea in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart reached
by
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apply
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around 61%. The proportion of bought instant
coffee
in Hobart was more than 50%,
while
Sydney and Melbourn were below
its
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it
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. But
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the consumotion
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consumotion
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consumption
of fresh
coffee
were
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was
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almost
equally
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equal
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.
However
, the people of Brisban went to
cafe
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cafes
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more than
Adelaide
, at about 53%.
While
the percentage of bought instant and fresh
coffee
were the same in both
Brishban
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Brisbane
and
Adelaide
, at nearly 50% and 30%,
respectivelly
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respectively
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, adelaide with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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