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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of
earnings
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 from the export of five different types of
products
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 in one country in two years 2015 and 2016.
Also
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, the table gives information about the percentage of changes in the
value
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 of those kinds of
products
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 in that period.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the export of
petroleum
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 and engineered
products
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 made more profit than textile and agricultural ones.
Moreover
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, the variation in the
value
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 of textiles was higher than other
products
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 compared with agricultural and
petroleum
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 commodities which had the least changes. Regarding the bar chart,
petroleum
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 and engineered goods made the highest amounts of
earnings
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 for that country with approximately 60 billion dollars each year.
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, the gems and jewellery category were in the third position of export
then
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, agricultural and textile commodities respectively with a range of 25 billion dollars to 30 billion dollars every year. Alongside the bar chart which is about the amounts of their
earnings
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 and turning to the table, it is revealed that the percentage of changes in their
value
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 was not related to their amount of
earnings
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. Textiles had the most variation with about 15% compared with agricultural
products
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 and
petroleum
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 ones with 0.81% and 3% respectively. Engineered goods and gems and jewellery had a range of 5 to 8 per cent for their
value
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 variations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, products, value, petroleum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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