The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart
illustrats
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illustrates
how much both
gender
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genders
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were educating six different courses
that
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apply
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related to
art
that take place
in
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an
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university in
UK
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the UK
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in 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that
although
female students were higher portion than males in every subject, only in
art
and design that the
propertion
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proportion
of boys was more than girls.
To begin
with, the top three most
feavorite
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favourite
subgect
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subject
subjects
were
english
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English
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and literature, communication and media study, and linguistics, the female students in these
subject
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subjects
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around
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were around
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200-250
peoples
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people
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,
while
male students
lower
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were lower
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than that. Turning
to
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, the top least
feavorite
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favourite
subjects were philosophy, history and
archeology
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archaeology
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, and
art
and design. The philosophy has 50 males and 150 females,
which
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and
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this
subject is the lowest
propertion
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proportion
in male
student
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students
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. Followed by, almost 100 boys and about 125 girls in history and
archeology
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archaeology
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.
Finally
,
art
and design experienced a
propertion
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proportion
that female lower than
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the male
a male
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male
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males
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with 175 males and 150 females.
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  • proportion
  • art-related subjects
  • gender distribution
  • predominate
  • significant
  • gender imbalances
  • percentages
  • comparison
  • balanced distribution
  • data
  • figures
  • trends
  • popular
  • least popular
  • subject choices
  • analyze
  • overview
  • summarize
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