The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.
The graphs
appear
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the percentage of buying
computer
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computers
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from 2002 to 2010 , and for
academic
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academics
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between 2002 and 2010. It shows the amount of
computer
trades keep
climb
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up every single year. In 2010, many people have
been
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become
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interesting
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to
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in
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technology, it easier, faster, and more convenient to find information
from
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on
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internet
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the internet
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,
computer
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and computer
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provides
that
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benefits. No doubt
for
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education,
allow
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allows
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pupils to access sources of data.
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,
learner
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learners
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in
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at
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postgraduate
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the postgraduate
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level must do lots of research, thesis,
and
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et cetera.
Computer
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The computer
A computer
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is the best assistant for these assignments.
Comparing
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to 2002,
It
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just a few of
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the number
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number
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numbers
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in fact that some people aren’t affordable
by
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the high cost, they might
concern
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about security in
program
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the program
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as well, and maybe it’s unnecessary enough. In conclusion, even though in
past
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the past
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computer
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the computer
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was unpopular,
despite
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apply
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years after
or
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apply
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nowadays it is
the
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a
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good function that
had
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was
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invented and
this
fact is undeniable.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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