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The graphs show us woman jobless rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013-2014. There are 4 countries of UK.

The graphs show us woman jobless rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013-2014. There are 4 countries of UK.
The graphs show us
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woman's
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woman
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women
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 jobless
rates
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 in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013-2014. There are 4 countries
of
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in
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UK
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the UK
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. We can see how female unemployment changed in 2014
by contrast
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 2013.
Lets
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 analyse how
rates
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 changed in 2013. We can see that the highest
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percent
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percentage
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 of jobless has England which was 6.8
precent
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per cent
.
Wales
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 been 5.4
precent
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per cent
 which good result than England which
have
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 negative readings. In 2014
rates
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was
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were
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 different.
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Due to in
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 Northern Ireland wordlessness
deacresed
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decreased
for
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by
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 1
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percent
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per cent
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, they have the best results
as
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at
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 4.6
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percent
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per cent
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. Other countries have
decresed
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decreased
 except Scotland. But Scotland
different
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is different
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 from the rest, because female unemployment has
incresed
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increased
for
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by
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 0.5
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percent
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per cent
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 which
bad
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is bad
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. So
others
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other
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 remaining countries
has
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have
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 improved their unemployment for
better
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the better
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, so woeklessnes
deacresed
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decreased
. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 the good
rates
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has
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have
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 Northern Ireland, the worse is Scotland.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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