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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the provided bar chart reveals the unemployment rate of women in 4
countries
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 of
UK
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the UK
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,
such
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 as England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland between 2013 and 2014.
Overall
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, there were two basic trends: upward and downward. In Scotland, there was a significant rise in the unemployment rate,
whereas
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 other
countries
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 experienced a steady fall within
the
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apply
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1 year. It is apparently seen that the number of jobless females in England, Wales and Northern Ireland decreased slightly. English women had the highest percentage with 6,8% among all
countries
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.
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, as Wales ladies as Ireland females had the approximate
percent
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per cent
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 of unemployment, the former had
0,4
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a 0,4
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% decline,
while
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 the latter had
1
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a 1
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% difference.
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, in 2014, the lowest rate was between Irish girls (4,6%).
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, there was a gradual increase in Scotland. Its percentage was uplifting from 6,1% to 6,7%, which had the highest unoccupied amount of women among all
countries
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.

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