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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two plans
illustrates
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illustrate
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 changes to
a
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the
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 ground
floor
Use synonyms
 of
museum
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the museum
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 from 1990 to 2010. The most significant alteration was the location of
statue
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the statue
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. In
2010
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2010,
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 it had been moved to the centre of
ground
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the ground
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floor
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 from the left side of
stairs
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the stairs
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.
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Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 there was
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instead
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, instead
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 of
Correct article usage
the Archeology
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Archeology
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Archaeology
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 gallery, a Children’s interactive zone and
Poster
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a Poster
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 display area on the right part of
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floor
Correct article usage
the floor
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. The natural history room was located on the left part of the building,
while
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 the archaeology gallery was on the right side.
Additionally
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,
there
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apply
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was built a lift
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a lift was built
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 between
Local
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the Local
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 history room and
Gift
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the Gift
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shop
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shop,
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that
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which
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 was enlarged and became
also
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 a Cafe.
Therefore
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, some of
walls
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the walls
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 from
Local
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the Local
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 history room to
Children’s
Correct article usage
the Children’s
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 interactive zone had been taken down.
However
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 Museum office did not change the location, Reception Counter moved closer to the expanded entrance.
Overall
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,
ground
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the ground
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floor
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 of
museum
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the museum
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 has undergone a number of major alterations
since
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from
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 1990 to 2010.

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task response
Write a short intro that names 1990 and 2010 plans and what you will compare.
grammar
Use past simple for the changes, and past perfect only when needed to show a thing had been done before another past action.
coherence
Link ideas with clear connect words: 'first', 'next', 'but', 'however', 'in addition'.
structure
Be crisp and simple: some sentences are long; break into two.
grammar
Check article and noun form: 'the museum', 'an archaeology gallery', 'a lift'.
content
Includes many changes with details.
task
Conveys a compare between 1990 and 2010.
structure
Concluion note summarises changes.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • exhibition space
  • gallery rooms
  • visitor facilities
  • accessibility
  • redesign
  • expansion
  • administrative areas
  • staff-only areas
  • gift shop
  • entrance
  • lobby area
  • restrooms
  • cafes
  • improvements
  • access areas
  • ground floor
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