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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back. Things to include: - Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. - Polite. No one responds to insults. - Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? - Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

#restaurant #manager #money #facts #insults #outline #firmness
Dear Manager, I recently visited your
restraurant
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restaurant
 with my family and the
overall
 experience wasn't good. I would like to bring
this
 to your kind notice. I made a reservation in advance for 6 people on 23rd August, but on
arrival
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 the table was reserved for only 4 people. We had to wait for an hour to get the seating. Even after the long wait and killing half the
appetide
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appetite
, soiled plates destroyed the desire to eat food. Because we had already ordered, it was all waste for us. We didn't eat and had to leave with
empty
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an empty
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 stomach. I would ask you to refund the bill including the taxes. I have been visiting
this
restraurant
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restaurant
 for
past
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the past
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 10 years and never faced
such
 predicaments. I always enjoy coming to your restaurant. I'm sure you will consider
this
complain
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 with the utmost importance and bring the services to prior levels. Yours Sincerely, Sameer Sharma
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